Tuesday, May 12, 2009

WAG # 11 Fear Factor

The sun is shining and that means that in the high street all the coffee places are emptying tables onto the street in a bid to entice customers to take a break and samples their wares. Being the type to be easily persuaded I plump for an outside table and settle back.

A man catches my eye, he is tall and has a rounded tummy, he seems to be looking for something as his eyes are swerving from side to side. It crosses my mind that he may be under the influence as his path is less than straight. He makes his way towards the coffee shop and stumbles through the door, reappearing a couple of minutes later. He sits at a nearby table, breaking pieces from his muffin away and eating them quickly, still looking all around him, he seems nervous, as if someone will move him along, or maybe he doesn't want to be found and is looking for the hunter.

I lost interest and return to the rather tasty muffin in front of me. Suddenly a loud scraping comes from beside me, the man I had been watching moment before has swept his chair back and is hunching on top of it, considerably amusing many of his fellow diners. He seems to be trying to say something and is gesticulating wildly towards something under the table, the only sound he can make is a strangling cooing sound. How ironic then that the cause of this hullabaloo would seem to be a few pigeons that have gathered in the vain hope of swiping a few crumbs. As the pigeons strut along, looking this way and that they remind me of the way the man was walking, expecting to be moved on or shooed away. A member of staff persuades the man down, clearly concerned about the health and safety elements of the man's actions and escorts him to an inside table. I can't help feeling a little guilty as I regard my empty plate and the crumbs scattered on the floor for the birds.

9 comments:

Anonymous said...

I had a friend years ago who was afraid of pigeons, and it made walking through some places in Boston very difficult!

Well written!

Anonymous said...

I too had a friend that was terrified of birds. She was scared of their eyes.

I enjoyed your piece, wspecially the end with the scatterings of your crumbs.

Elizabeth Haysmont said...

Nice twist, having the man emulate his object of fear! And the line about the crumbs for the birds was a delightful windup!

Good piece! Welcome to WAG!

Cheers!

Iain Martin said...

Hi Mel, welcome to WAG and good first entry. It has a nice easy flow, good development, and clever ending.

Frances said...

There's something rather siinister and thought-provoking about a man who looks and behave like a pigeon, yet is afraid of them.

J. M. Strother said...

Hi, Mel. Sorry I'm so late getting around to reading these. I liked your piece. Also found it interesting that some of the others have friends that are afraid of pigeons. So I have to ask, fiction or non-fiction? Well told, either way. As others have mentioned the crumbs were a very nice ending.

I am telling all the WAG folks about a flash fiction contest that starts tomorrow. It is not related to the WAG, just a nice contest you might want to check out. It is on Editor Unleashed. 1000 words or less, with cash prizes. I plan to enter and encourage others to do so as well.

I'll try and be more timely in making the rounds for the next WAG. Hope to see more from you.
~jon

dan powell said...

Sorry for my lateness too. As the others said, the man behaving like the object of his fear is a neat twist. Pigeons are weird. the way they move is sinister, heads bobbing and lolling. Is fear of pigeons linked to their being dirty. Aren't they supposed to carry more bacteria/disease than rats.....or is that another urban myth?

Nancy J. Parra said...

Hi Welcome to Wag!

Sorry for writing so late-but I enjoyed this piece. Great job! Cheers-

Anonymous said...

I enjoyed reading this, you capture the pigeon-like behaviour of the man really well.